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Father, as I lay in bed this night
I fear tomorrow, no longer willed to fight.
All I ask is that you take me to you
Where tears are not shed and love is true.
Take me home by way of broken heart,
For it’s been breaking from the start.
You know my love is not so feign;
Please release me from this searing pain.
Only you are listening to my personal cries
Because you care to look with loving eyes.
Please…take me home by way of broken heart,
For it’s been breaking from the start.
©2003-2010 ~formerlyknownas
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:iconkata:
absolutly beautiful, and very sad. I really like this poem

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:iconkey256:
i think this is a good poem but the fact remains it is still a forced rhyme poem and sadly it does begin to show in some lines.
i do however absolutly love the picture and the question it begs: is this a beautiful sunrise, or one final farewell sunset?
:iconveritactive:
I didn't notice it rhymed until mid-way through, and it didn't really bother me or anything even after the fact. The repetition of Take me home by way of broken heart /
For it’s been breaking from the start
is great in that it doesn't feel like repetition ... it's a memory by the time it's met again and it lingers ... reinforcing it.

I really like the lilt of this poem. The rhythm is so natural, and yet it lends itself to the wistful feeling of the vocabulary used.

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Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
~ Dylan Thomas
:icondesert-rose:
i love the rhyme, the emotive words, the expression. :) (Smile) great job

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~The powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?~ Dead Poet's Society

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